Grade my essay on persuasiveness!!!! 10 pts!?

Not convinced. You don't believe one bit of what you wrote. And, because you don't, it is hard to fake enthusiasm for a point you don't believe. I would emphasize what you appear to believe.. that is that YOU as one person can make a difference.. I am not responsible for saving this world.. But as one person you can do something.. Too many people take the approach that they cant save the world and, so, do nothing. Apathy is rampant in our country. Why not show people why this viewpoint is wrong..